Post 1
Linear, fiction, narrative.
Length: 1-2 min
Target audience: adults 25 and older.
Tagline:
(?)The anguish of anticipation( I know that this slogan is cheesy but I honestly have not come up with a better on yet)
Treatment:
Camera pans in a dark closet and comes to a stop on a little girl sitting in the corner looking at the closet door. Rapid breathing. Close-up of the face. Girl biting her lips. Close-up of fidgeting hands. Zoom out, girl moves towards the door. POV shot
of the slits of the closet door and what can be seen behind it. Dark shape suddenly blocks the light outside the closet. Girl moves back into the corner. Close-up of her closing her eyes. Zoom out, door slowly opens. Suddenly another girl jumps in and yells: "Found you!" the closet is lit now and they both happily run out.
Update: I have reconsidered my idea a little bit. I think I suggest too much. So instead of a little girl I will have either a teenager or an adult female. The person will be obviously agitated, stressed without any hint as to why. I want the viewer to be intrigued by what caused such distress. The ending will be the same.
Linear, fiction, narrative.
Length: 1-2 min
Target audience: adults 25 and older.
Tagline:
(?)The anguish of anticipation( I know that this slogan is cheesy but I honestly have not come up with a better on yet)
Treatment:
Camera pans in a dark closet and comes to a stop on a little girl sitting in the corner looking at the closet door. Rapid breathing. Close-up of the face. Girl biting her lips. Close-up of fidgeting hands. Zoom out, girl moves towards the door. POV shotof the slits of the closet door and what can be seen behind it. Dark shape suddenly blocks the light outside the closet. Girl moves back into the corner. Close-up of her closing her eyes. Zoom out, door slowly opens. Suddenly another girl jumps in and yells: "Found you!" the closet is lit now and they both happily run out.
Update: I have reconsidered my idea a little bit. I think I suggest too much. So instead of a little girl I will have either a teenager or an adult female. The person will be obviously agitated, stressed without any hint as to why. I want the viewer to be intrigued by what caused such distress. The ending will be the same.
You're update makes the surprise ending stronger and less expected but the motivation for the character's actions and emotional state are forced. She is only acting that way for the sake of the movie. If you do use a child, it makes sense that the child could feel scared in the situation, even if it is only a game. The tagline isn't cheesy but it does have a sexual connotation that does not fit the story. Very nice storyboards.
ReplyDeleteI also want to add that this is very good storytelling in a short time period.
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